I Want You Out by melancholystar

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Author:	melancholystar
ASL Info:	17/f/tx
Elite Ratio:	4.53 - 598/302/32
Words:	107

Class/Type:	Rant/Venting
Total Views:	369
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	559

Description:
I wrote this a few months ago.... I was very angry at this person... and have not yet forgiven them for what they did. Whenever I'm really angry I write down my thoughts...I figured all I have is poetry on here so I might as well put down some angry thoughts as well. See what you guys have to say..

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There is this burning fury throughout my being. I'm so angry I could just ruin my existence and yours. How could you be so unintelligent? You have taken away the little joy I owned in my blackened emotions. You joke about what you have done, you don't even apologize. I want you gone. I have endured so much suffering because of you. I have been derided more then one would think possible. I stood up for you no matter how much pain you caused, but you have crossed my last line, cut my last wrist, and given me no choice. I want you out of my life.

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  indeed, writing is a good way to control one's aggression. life often gets out of hand, and how you deal with it will determine the overall consequences. some will resort to forms of abuse to themselves or others. some will turn to pen and paper. you have chosen wisely, and i pray you continue this route.
-hybrid
| Posted on 2005-07-29 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]
   hhmm im definetly confused. Theres something you're not telling me about you.. this is not possible. How are people mean to you, or how do people not love you. Geezz this was honest, i dont really feel like this towards anyone though. Here are some words to live by..

Hate, hate your enemies
Save, save your friends
Find, find your place
Speak, speak the truth

- Kurt Cobain

Anyways.. this was interesting. Still confused though..

Bruno
| Posted on 2004-08-18 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
  THis is a very good write the words flowed and i really enjoyed the line (or the part of the line):
'cut my last wrist'
that was very creative and original wording...
one way you could make this a little better is if you seperated it into seperate lines or stanzas, but besides that its perfect...good job, keep it up
| Posted on 2004-07-06 00:00:00 | by morte | [ Reply to This ]
  it's true... you do rant beautifully. i tend to be incoherent and red with fury and screaming nonsensical phrases.

this is good.
| Posted on 2004-07-04 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]
  Thats good, i find poetry to be a good way of getting feelings out to. the end bit:
but you have crossed my last line, cut my last wrist, and given me no choice. I want you out of my life.
Is really cool,

Madrox
| Posted on 2004-07-02 00:00:00 | by madrox | [ Reply to This ]

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