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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 473



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       Ah, crap.


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    It's funny.

    I never had insomnia before. Sleep always came easily, at the blink of an eye and the touch of a pillow.

    But this, now. Eyes refusing to close, watching technicolor replays of you, of us.

    Circadian rhythm rewired upside-down; I'm a nocturnal creature, now.

    Of course I want the bliss of sleep, but you haunt my dreams too...

    Dawn will find me awake. A new day to hope.




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 14:22:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      see, i prefer moments like this: this desperate yet willful, tired and focused state of mind. and i think i prefer it when you let it all out instead of reducing your syntax and wording; i think writing like this is more freeing in a way, less hung up on minimalist existentialism... which i suppose i suffer from, and you too in your own way.

    in saying this, this is a first paragraph to me.
    where's the rest of this story, miss?
    still being written?
    i guess so.

    i think... broken hearts are such a waste.
    and that... there is joy in finding a different meaning to life through someone else's eyes and experiences.

    find that.
    someone wild and wandering would be my best bet.
    | Posted on 2009-05-03 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand "oh crap" and what is there about how a soul does not seem to understand how we release someone, or that we are released? Even if it's not by your choice, the slow and stodgy soul
    being just doesn't understand for a very long time.

    And that is why time means so much. I hope it all works out and that you begin to sleep. Love shouldn't be so confusing. But it is good to write about these things when we need to.

    Hope your dreams get sweeter.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-07-03 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      if literal, then i feel the pain or insomnia and im sorry for it, does get annoying.still deal w/ it kinda, nights become good now.
    Writing wise, it a nicepiece, just can't explain but beautiful
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, don't count on it.
    I was an insomnic for a few years (til I got some heavy duty sleeping pills) and things only get worse come morning, cause I was hardly awake but not asleep. sigh.

    But hey i like this piece...it captures the hope part pretty well.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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