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    dots Submission Name: Why I Wasn't There on Friday Nightdots
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    Author: dancer-of-words
    Elite Ratio:    4.91 - 120/86/41
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I don't expect it to make any sense...it's very personal.


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    dotsWhy I Wasn't There on Friday Nightdots
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    You were the one who was hidden
    for I didn't know you at all.
    For you all the silent words came, unbidden
    for you were the one who stood tall!

    I was the one who was wrong.
    I couldn't succeed, didn't call
    I was the one who could scarce carry on
    and I don't deserve you at all.

    I am the one who is wrong!
    You are the one who can sing.
    I have a broken voice, I'm all alone now...
    I used to be able to sing!

    Next year when I have come over
    the last blackened hill in my heart
    when depression ceases burdens on those searching
    for cover,
    wishing for some kind of new start.

    Then I will be waiting in wishes.
    I will be hoping in dreams.

    When the hope that's inside
    has stopped trying to hide

    that you'll know I am not what I seemed
    to be

    I seemed to be sad
    I seemed to be mean

    that you'll know
    I am not
    what I seemed.




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