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    dots Submission Name: Be Something Newdots
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    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    20/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 90/220/226
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 538
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    Description:
       I'm seriously depressed


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    dotsBe Something Newdots
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    I'm in hate with myself

    Stay away from that damn mirror
    Eat the pain away.
    Nothing could hurt you again
    Nothing will hurt you again.
    As long as you're careful
    As long as you watch yourself.

    Stop the memories
    Stop the thoughts and stop
    The lies and deception.

    At night the horror movies
    Play in my head with those
    Horrible memories.

    I can't stand those damn mirrors
    That taunt and remind me that
    I have to be myself. Damn it
    I want to switch lives and be
    Someone new.




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 17:22:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ANGSTYYYY . . . . . . . . .
    but my poems are angsty too.

    well . . . . . . .
    I really like this piece because I just think its something that soooo many people can relate to. Everybody goes through something like this at one point in their lives and yeah . . .
    . . . its gonna be hard
    . . . youre gonna cry
    . . . youre gonna feel alone
    . . . it may seem like your worlds gonna end
    but its not. Youll finally come the realization that there are people out there with lives much worse than what yours is like. I really hope you feel better because depression id obviously not a good feeling . . . . and alot of the times it makes you do stupid things.

    Overall -
    I really liked it. It seems like you put a lot of heart into this piece and I really felt as tho I could relate to your poem. . . especially this part :

    Stay away from that damn mirror
    Eat the pain away.
    Nothing could hurt you again
    Nothing will hurt you again.
    As long as you're careful
    As long as you watch yourself.

    great job and feel better!

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