Be Something New

Author: Jazzy ASL Info:    20/f/USA Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 90 /221 /227 Words: 96

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Be Something New

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I'm in hate with myself Stay away from that damn mirror Eat the pain away. Nothing could hurt you again Nothing will hurt you again. As long as you're careful As long as you watch yourself. Stop the memories Stop the thoughts and stop The lies and deception. At night the horror movies Play in my head with those Horrible memories. I can't stand those damn mirrors That taunt and remind me that I have to be myself. Damn it I want to switch lives and be Someone new.

Submitted on 2008-05-30 17:22:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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ANGSTYYYY . . . . . . . . . but my poems are angsty too. well . . . . . . . I really like this piece because I just think its something that soooo many people can relate to. Everybody goes through something like this at one point in their lives and yeah . . . . . . its gonna be hard . . . youre gonna cry . . . youre gonna feel alone . . . it may seem like your worlds gonna end but its not. Youll finally come the realization that there are people out there with lives much worse than what yours is like. I really hope you feel better because depression id obviously not a good feeling . . . . and alot of the times it makes you do stupid things. Overall - I really liked it. It seems like you put a lot of heart into this piece and I really felt as tho I could relate to your poem. . . especially this part : Stay away from that damn mirror Eat the pain away. Nothing could hurt you again Nothing will hurt you again. As long as you're careful As long as you watch yourself. great job and feel better! > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > S D 4 2

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