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    dots Submission Name: Swimmingdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       A poem of imagery. Read deep.


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    dotsSwimmingdots
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    A quick splash, rippling away
    as another joins the wide pool.
    The suns begins to set, light fades
    and the pool becomes a lake,
    and drips become a river flowing.
    The cold begins to become real
    while hands and feet become numb;
    the dark night approaches fast.




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 18:20:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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