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    dots Submission Name: Caressdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCaressdots
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    Lightly tracing the goosebumps on your skin,
    gently kissing your sweet lips
    and caressing your soft cheek,
    I hold you close.




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 18:23:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short and sweet. There is a sense of bitterness laying at the end. Perhaps a sense that one day you and your love may have to part?
    | Posted on 2008-09-15 00:00:00 | by augustcranes | [ Reply to This ]
      too short, need to elaborate more:)
    | Posted on 2008-06-02 00:00:00 | by Love Hurts..... | [ Reply to This ]
      It's good... needs something though. Emotion maybe?
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by laffeytaffey | [ Reply to This ]


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