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    dots Submission Name: In Darkness Metdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIn Darkness Metdots
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    I met you in darkness' grasp,
    the shadow of death's scythe held tight
    and called to you from the endless night
    with a powerful hold from lonliness vast.

    I met you in darkness myself,
    slighted by love, in my mind's cell
    I was trapped and held as by a jail
    of dark and evil lonliness to die.

    We met in darkness, each others light,
    while still trapped in the hell of our minds
    we were held by each other's unknown love, blind
    to the content of one another's hearts.

    Though we met in darkness, I'll drag you to light
    and give to you what I must to help you feel
    happiness and joy in this life; the wheel
    of fate can not control us or our hearts.




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 18:26:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There seems to be something that you're not saying in this poem. There are things...missing.

    The imagery was true as was the poetic message. You have a unique way of saying things, and I think it's great the way you are able to project yourself in these simple words that hold a deeper meaning. Something sacred and alive.

    My congradulations to you and your love.
    | Posted on 2008-09-15 00:00:00 | by augustcranes | [ Reply to This ]


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