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    dots Submission Name: Illusionsdots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 35/17/24
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 72
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    Bytes: 807



    Description:
       know whats right
    believe in it
    act on it


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    dotsIllusionsdots
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    Take my heart
    Take my soul
    Will you use it against me?
    Will you drown my heart
    Drown my soul
    In the mystical mist
    That you so eagerly share?

    Take my heart
    Take my soul
    Will you use it against me?
    Will you strangle my heart
    And pawn my soul?

    Take my heart
    Take my soul
    Why am I so trusting?

    Take my heart
    Take my soul
    Why can’t I see clearly?

    Take my heart
    Take my soul
    But I beg you not to harm it
    I beg you not to lead me astray

    You steal my heart
    And you steal my soul
    When it’s too late
    And my time has run out
    For the mist is but an illusion
    As is your compassion




    Submitted on 2008-05-30 19:30:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This gives me a feeling of dread and longing for something wanted, but at the same time not wanted.. It makes me think of a love that was never meant to gbe, but tried for anyway even though it is bad and will never be anything other than that..
    It's a little redundant with each stanza repeating about heart and soul and I think you could have expanded on the kinds of loss felt, but other than that it is a good start..
    | Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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