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    dots Submission Name: 1st Lovedots

    Author: marray proetus
    ASL Info:    100/F/no where
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 24/32/30
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots1st Lovedots

    1st Love

    There are many other bonds
    Apart from friendship.
    Bonds that we donít understand
    And donít need to understand.
    Bonds that are nameless
    And that are to be experienced.
    Bonds that donít have any boundaries
    No limits.
    Bonds that bind hearts together
    In passion and love.

    As the sun dims into twilight
    The moon began to simmer brightly
    I stand still as the earth
    Moves around me,
    My heart beats faster
    As my breaths go deeper,
    Dreams blend into the realm of reality.

    Iím in a daze,
    Your charms are like the gentle breeze
    Brushing past me and taking me away.
    My eyes always wait to see you
    As my heart is relentless
    Iím destroying myself in you
    As the season of love remains eternal.

    Submitted on 2008-05-31 14:52:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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