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    dots Submission Name: My Home's Away From Homedots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 349
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy Home's Away From Homedots
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    If you ask me to go, do I have to stay?
    Or would it just be easier that way?
    The arguments fight like clenched fists
    Sometimes my biggest fear’s coming home
    The great things I did.. still disappointed
    I try but I can’t make you happy
    I guess it’s me that you’re trying to please

    You don’t have to say a word, I know

    You say you want me to go, then ask me to stay
    You push me then push me back into the doorway
    What do you want? Make up your mind
    This is my life, you lived yours you can’t live mine
    If you want the best for me, then set me free
    Life is much easier in a cage than on the street
    So let me go, let me out, I’m so tired of monotony..

    (She asks) “Where have you been all night,
    I’ve been waiting up for you?…”
    I was afraid I’d make it home tonight
    (wasting time thinking about life/hoping to clear the sphinx‘s eye)
    “Where have you been all night?”
    “I’ve been driving around”
    I was afraid I may get home alright!
    (circling our neighborhood hoping for an accident)

    I’m ready to cut the cord, cause you pulled the plug,
    If I’m just a stat, then read a chart but don’t ask me,
    (told you) I’m not like them, but you won’t listen,
    But you’ll see when my face hits your big screen T.V
    I told you I don’t need you but you need me
    When I get there I’ll never return
    You told me not to, you always get your way

    (She asks) “Where have you been all night,
    I’ve been waiting up for you?…”
    I was afraid I’d make it home tonight
    (wasting time thinking about life/hoping to clear the sphinx‘s eye)
    “Where have you been all night?”
    “I’ve been driving around”
    I was afraid I may get home alright!
    (circling our neighborhood hoping for an accident)

    Sometimes my biggest fear is coming home
    My biggest fear is getting home safe




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