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    dots Submission Name: Find Yourself in the Darkdots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 577
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1765



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    dotsFind Yourself in the Darkdots
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    She came to me with aging eyes that will never rest
    Abound to see a gaping heart that I cannot arrest
    Though hollow, she fills up on animal parts
    Sheís punished herself
    Old enough to know, young enough not to care
    Itís going nowhere

    It seems that both ends of her were not meant to meet
    She canít solder them to create some electric connection
    But sheís got a jolt of light she knows not about
    Itís okay, itís intuitive, it will never escape

    So please speak upside down
    The first mistake she ever made was never making that mistake
    So please speak up!

    The daily news is her demise
    So unorganized
    She dressed for them
    But they didnít see in her eyes
    Her skins the disguise
    Though hollow, she fills up on animal parts
    Sheís punished herself
    Old enough to know, young enough not to care
    She's going nowhere

    It seems that both ends of her were not meant to meet
    She canít solder them to create some electric connection
    But sheís got a jolt of light she knows not about
    Itís okay, itís intuitive, it will never escape

    So please speak upside down
    The first mistake she ever made
    was never making that mistake
    So please speak up!
    She never made mistakes
    She never knew of one

    We allow our youth to lie
    ďbut itís just the second timeĒ
    A slap on the wrist but the third timeís a charm
    (again) We allow our youth to lie
    ďand what about the second time?Ē
    The third timeís a charm, and theyíve become the known
    But still unknown..
    With nowhere to go




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