Sour Kinship.

Author: xXCptn_SephyXx ASL Info:    22/f/PA Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46 /119 /104 Words: 49

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Sour Kinship.

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Oh god Lost again, it seems. The Morning star burning bright Has met its end, Taking flight. Took your words And threw them out— Fed them to the dogs who were honored, Devouring the bond once close, Digesting it into nothing, Nothing but vomit of impossible repair.

Submitted on 2008-05-31 20:40:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I found this write to be incredibily sad To me it sounds like you feel defeated and cannot garner the strength to move forward I urge you to not give up and let the Negative win Look closely at the situation and find the Positives and lessons learned from this relationship I Promise you with the lessons learned and knowledge gained from this relationship your next relationship will be much stronger and you will be much better prepared Though short this write carried a strong wallop and was filled with Honest True Emotion Great Work!! God Bless Ron Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron

| Posted on 2008-05-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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