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    dots Submission Name: Artificial Skiesdots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    21/Lady/never-never land
    Elite Ratio:    4.01 - 209/206/67
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 696



    Description:
       love, currently. in a nut shell.


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    dotsArtificial Skiesdots
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    A far cry from where we've been, its like daisies on doomsday.
    Seldom do we know whats better for us,
    even more seldom do we act upon it.

    Time can reach through the miles between us,
    and bring you here one last time.
    Just to sit and smile in comforting silence,
    a smile, a laugh, a sigh.

    My heart could shift away in fear,
    and I could learn to turn away from hope,
    but neither course would bring you here
    to smile, to laugh, to love.

    Hold tight, dear love, and wait,
    for I will be next to you soon.
    When the sunshine fades and the hope remains,
    I will come back to you.




    Submitted on 2008-06-01 00:46:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The overall write seems dark and somewhat depressive but the undertone and meaning a little optimistic. I do like the story thought short. The title is very catching but doesn't really match the feel in ,y opinion.

    Good write, hope to see more.
    chelsea.
    | Posted on 2008-06-03 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]



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