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    dots Submission Name: Luck, Chance, Karma, or Christ?dots
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    Author: UnspokenDreamer
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    dotsLuck, Chance, Karma, or Christ?dots
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         In all of our lives there are things we can't explain. Events and moments that have taken place that seem impossible. Simply understanding the beginning of all things is something beyond our ability. These are the kinds of things that have caused us to begin using terms and expressions like Luck, Chance, and Karma.

         But I submit that all of these are only mediocre attempts to throw a blanket over the reality that there is surely something bigger going on around us. And not only around us, but deep in our bones we feel it. You and I were meant to live for so much more.

         Was it Luck that began to form life out of nothing? Or was it only Chance that this whole universe has come into perfect balance? Perhaps Karma explains the cosmos?

         I completely understand why man has made such things. Because deep in our souls there is a craving to understand ourselves and our existence. We need to understand the 'how' and 'why'. For some, Luck is deep enough to satisfy their hunger. Others settle on Chance, and it seems as though only the psuedo-wise and learned speak loftily of Karma.

         Perhaps there is some truth to these things. But I am confident that, "All truth is God's truth." Which is a concise way of saying, "If anything is true in all creation, it is because God has designed it to be that way." But I wonder if you have ever stopped to examine this 'Christ' that so many hastily speak of? Wouldn't it seem right for such a controversial man to be frequently mis-represented? I mean, take any important figure in government today, their words are more heavily manipulated than any other. And by the end of the day, no one is really sure what to believe. This is why it is so beautiful that we have the Bible. Because these words are Christ's, and though many have underrgone differing translations, the heart of the Creator is omnipresent within them.

         I do not know your story. And you do not know mine. But I do know that we share a common desire within our bones. We were meant to live for so much more than Luck, Chance, or Karma. We were meant to live for Christ, who is the center of everything. I am not suggesting that you go join the local church, I am suggesting that you pursue this one they call, "The Savior", whatever that means for you. I am no fool, and I have searched and wondered about this man, only to find out that he is more than a man. He is God, come down from Heaven to bring us back with him.

    There is always Hope when you know the truth of Christ.




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      To critique this peice, I would have to add to what you've said, and I can't. I've rarely heard the truth in such a forum as this, and I applaud you for it.

    It's like when you watch a TV show or movie and they actually say "Jesus" instead of a generic word such as god vs. God.

    My favorite part:

    "This is why it is so beautiful that we have the Bible. Because these words are Christ's, and though many have underrgone differing translations, the heart of the Creator is omnipresent within them."

    That is the bottom line, my friend. Thank you so much for saying it here - not in in pulpit, not in the safety of a church, your family or a bible study class - but here, where there are many that don't understand.

    "More power to ya."
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2008-06-03 00:00:00 | by Seagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i would try to refrain from using the line 'you and i were meant to live for so much more' because all i can hear when i read that line is the switchfoot song and while i guess there are worse things for my mind to think of i think it is too similar and therefore takes away from the piece...


    it would seem you are getting more and more in touch with the apologist within you and that is an admirable thing

    finding ways to reason and explain the longing inside and the answers we cant find is something we all try to do at stages.

    for me knowing christ is everything and one thing i really liked about this piece was that you tolf the reader not to seek him by joining a church necessarily but by going to his word... by reading the bible for themselves and asking god to open their minds/hearts/spirits to his reality.

    it is sad the way the church has misrepresented god. the way the church has used him as a marketting gimmick or whathaveyou...

    good work...
    | Posted on 2008-06-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I completely understand why man has made such things. Because deep in our souls there is a craving to understand ourselves and our existence. We need to understand the 'how' and 'why'. For some, Luck is deep enough to satisfy their hunger. Others settle on Chance, and it seems as though only the psuedo-wise and learned speak loftily of Karma.


    A bit of confusion on such a weighty matter would seem understandable, given the fact that so many manipulate the existence of God into a sales pitch for an agenda based more on political/social/moral opinion than reality. If there are some of willing to examine a man's words to fully understand his position, then wouldn't it seem reasonable to examine the words of a deity to comprehend what "Truth" is?

    I say yes. BTW, this is probably the best written and reasoned post you've submitted on this site.

    Bill
    | Posted on 2008-06-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This was definately thought out for a while before being put on paper and is also very moving.. Myself, I am not a believer in just one god, but many gods and goddesses, yet still I can understand and see the beauty of the thoughts you have expressed here.. I think my favorite line of this piece would have to be:

    "But I submit that all of these are only mediocre attempts to throw a blanket over the reality that there is surely something bigger going on around us."

    This sentence has beautiful imagery that brings out the picture you want to show with striking detail.. The second stanza is also very well written in that the question you pair with each of your key words seems to the the exact right question to ask and it flows very nicely..
    The only suggestions I could make would be to look over your punctuation and grammar closer.. It may just be me, but starting a sentence with "but" or "and" just doesn't ever make a good sentence..
    Anyway, thanks for the interesting and moving read..

    Tiffany aka Maskannai
    | Posted on 2008-06-01 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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