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    dots Submission Name: 6dots

    Author: TSTCTC
    ASL Info:    18/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.59 - 61/87/51
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    ocean tides bellowed in the shaking waves
    tossed like rags and cloaks of mournful tomorrows
    raised in anger, a hand that guides the shores
    and ripping dunes of ocean blues lack a presence of today
    stay away
    no sunrise can fog the clapping skies
    no sunset can part the waves into castles of love
    stones made from heart but foundations made from charcoal
    like pipes in a factored cave
    measured and pulled till the roofs fall through
    ice dragged through open wounds and a mother cripples her chidlren
    with a vicious embrace
    strong like the ocean
    weak like the salts we swim in.

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