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    dots Submission Name: different lightdots

    Author: nansofast
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 2351/2103/268
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    a repost from the cafe or maybe here
    who knows?

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    dotsdifferent lightdots

    I hear the whisper of her soul
    she's chandelierious
    yes, while we were at church
    a vision of her crown chakra
    shimmered, strewn with webs
    of color in full moon night

    the beauty of magic says
    we never really say goodbye
    later, she found me
    asleep in deep
    blankets of God
    and we snuggled
    in peace quake dreams
    the resonance of childhood
    inside us
    soul skins entwined
    like a wick-
    earth as candle
    to the sky.

    Submitted on 2008-06-01 19:48:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Do you find all this praise good for you? *wink*

    Your poems pull me deeper into myself Nan. I thank God for them.


    | Posted on 2008-12-14 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is... wow. This is excellent. The different sorts of magic you pull together to make one whole- the Church, the chakra, the "different light." Not just the beauty of being or some holy rapture but the beauty of being together, of existing as one.

    I especially like the way you address the magic itself

    " The beauty of magic says we never really say goodbye"

    and that sentence adds a whole different layer to it, like maybe she's not really there but in this realm she is and always will be. It reminds me of an exceptionally good anime called Lain where.... well, I won't give it away but the end result is she'll always be there.

    Aside from metaphor and my geeky obsessions, these lines

    she found me
    asleep in deep
    blankets of God
    and we snuggled
    in peace quake dreams

    are stellar. peace quake.... yeah. it fits, and I know why but I can't put it in words like you did so explaining it would ruin it probably.

    Anyways.... I liked it a lot.
    | Posted on 2008-06-21 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, you are a magician when it comes to words. It feels like a goddest trying to court a mortal dame and that, in itself, is a beautiful notion. And in this process of world bending and universe molding, you have shown colors that not every man have the tender audacity or ability to share.

    So, I thank you for your gift.
    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a terrific piece, as usual from you. love the 1st stanza - describing her in such glittering terms, yet managing to convey beauty rather than crassness.

    hope you're well, haven't seen much of you around here.


    | Posted on 2008-06-04 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that you are correct in every way and that your sister is always around, trying to whisper soothing words to you. This poem is her voice coming through your heart. The first stanza is so beautiful and I can just picture the light coming down from the chandelier, and the ROYGBIV of her soul. I think the fact that you were able to go deep inside yourself and write something as open and honest as this shows just how deeply rooted your love for her was. It's beautiful, Nan, and so are you.
    Love, Goddess
    | Posted on 2008-06-02 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I remain in a light
    levitantrum, peace blanketed
    in a flood of stars, bathed
    in the delerium of heaven
    goaded by hope that
    all will turn out
    all-knowing and alright

    Your light is no different
    than the soul stirred
    fireflies of distant worlds
    drumming among screen doors
    seeking the epiphany of night

    You did it again. Something about writing responses is suddenly beyond my ability to resist.

    Good day, Nan Sea
    | Posted on 2008-06-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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