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    dots Submission Name: Ode to summer dots
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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsOde to summer dots
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    Lightening bugs
    Grassy rugs

    Cars drive afar
    Lights glow on a long tall bar

    All I hear
    Is the gently wind whispering in my ear
    I have nothing to fear
    For the warmth that comforts me is near

    A summers’ night sky
    Glistens and twinkles as the sun says good bye
    Time does not fly
    Actually, it seems to stop as birds fly high

    Silence is bliss
    The reckless screaming will not be missed
    Ow!
    Nor will the mosquito’s kiss

    Ah summer thou art so strange yet pleasing










    Submitted on 2008-06-02 21:40:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the imagery in this. Gives me a happy, peaceful feeling. Except for the mosquito sting. Ouch!
    | Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by ModestyB | [ Reply to This ]


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