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    dots Submission Name: on past my religious skindots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotson past my religious skindots
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    there are flies in the way,
    & the way i stare down
    the corridors of streets each night,
    waiting for some sign of you.
    some hidden spark inside of you
    that holds on to something lost.

    in the forest,
    where i am treasured
    as a child would sing off-key,
    i become a king
    in my own becoming.
    each leaf seems to remember me
    as they would the wind.

    i close my tired eyes
    in soft hushes
    & remember what it's like to be me.
    & to sink
    into the gentle soil
    that always greets me.

    soon,
    i will dye the markings
    of my new beginning
    into the flesh that awaits me.
    & though some part of me is always dreaming,
    i know that my flesh has become my own
    & that your avoidance
    has only made it
    more realistic to wear.

    i have so much hope
    for things that scatter
    like sandcastles in some ancient tidal loss.
    this process of loving
    is in the bones
    & it moves outward,
    on past my religious skin
    & gone...




    Submitted on 2008-06-02 22:16:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      beautiful.

    love the word play.
    | Posted on 2008-06-03 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]


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