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    dots Submission Name: THEN.dots
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    Author: dark_dreams6789
    ASL Info:    17/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 6/11/12
    Words: 373
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 70
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2283



    Description:
       6-01-08

    Written for the same friend as in Come In Closer.

    I never got to show him that poem before he told me he hated me.

    Venting.


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    dotsTHEN.dots
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    My sweet ghost, I lied.
    Telling you I’m a mess, that wasn’t the hardest part to write.
    It’s writing this now, the very next day.
    Knowing that you’re gone, you were never here to stay.

    Things were blurry, I didn’t know what to think.
    I’m probably right, I think I need a shrink.
    You fault me for trying, fault me for slowly dieing.
    Looking at these self inflicted bruises, you say you caught me lying.

    I’ve cried so hard, you tell me to fuck off.
    Tell me it’s my own fault, Boy, I’ve grown too soft..
    You had to know right then, right then.
    Right then
    was when you killed me, killed US, Right then.

    Empty promises remain unbroken, but still empty.
    I need you here, but need You to leave.
    I’m ripping you off of my wall, You have already taken it all.
    You want me gone, gone, darling, I hope you're wrong.

    Things were blurry, I didn’t know what to think.
    I’m probably right, I think I need a shrink.
    You fault me for trying, fault me for slowly dieing.
    Looking at these self inflicted bruises, you say you caught me lying.

    I’ll be here when you want me, I’m sorry to say.
    Maybe I really am a really sad case.
    I think I need to leave this place.
    I need to get away, somewhere new to stay.

    I hope you’re happy, you’re getting your way.
    You want me to go away,
    Never again to return and play.
    You’ll never again hear anything I have to say.

    Things were blurry, I didn’t know what to think.
    I’m probably right, I think I need a shrink.
    You fault me for trying, fault me for slowly dieing.
    Looking at these self inflicted bruises, you say you caught me lying.

    Things were blurry, I didn’t know what to think.
    Everyone is probably right, I think I need a shrink.
    You fault me for trying, And you fault me for slowly dieing.
    You say you caught me lying, when I didn’t even know what exactly had gone wrong this time.

    You’ll never again hear anything I have to say.





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    ||| Comments |||
      oh oh oh....

    haha, this was definitly in a close tie with the first piece you posted....

    first of all....i'm sorry that he didn't get to see the first piece before he said he hated you....

    and i don't think he meant it...he is probably just hurt...or whatever....

    because...that other piece would have made him understand whatever it is you wanted him to understand....

    I’ll be here when you want me, I’m sorry to say.

    that line made me pick and an old scab...and i'm sure by the end of the night i'll be bleeding....

    but it's a scar i don't mind remembering....

    | Posted on 2008-06-03 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]


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