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Death of poetry

Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 192
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This one just came out from my heart last night, I'm in a delicate situation now, but still hoping.
Hope you like it!

Death of poetry

You're my love
You're my dream
You're my everything

Yet this tear
On my skin
Screams there's something beneath

Is this love
Just enough?
Or is there
Something wrong?

It is us!
You and me
It's our life!
In our hands

Can we fix
this slight crack
that is making me cry?

Poetry's what is wrong
it has died
from our souls

It's what makes
blue the sky
and makes happy our hearts

There's no more
between us
it has died
it is gone

Tell me what,
my sweet love,
what will go
from now on?

I need you
You're my love
What to do
if this tear doesn't go?

Can we bring it to love?
Or is life just like that?
Have we lived past our dream?
Or can we carry with?

Must I learn to adapt
to this poetry-free life?
Should I wipe all my tears
and pretend it was never here?

Or is there something else?
Can we fix our mistakes?
Will you please hold my hand
and bring me back to life.

Submitted on 2008-06-03 12:00:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was good. I like the picture it creates: there's love and happiness, but then out of nowhere a crack appears (which im guessing represents how things dont feel like they are what they should be), and you realize that this crack has appeared because all of the poetry is gone from your relationship. and this poetry represents romance and grandeur and expressions of love.

But the love hasn't disappeared-its still there- it just isnt as evident or expressed to the same extent as it used to be.

Your relationship has become bland, and you want to bring back the romance.

I just wish you'd used more imagery in this; i like the images of the tear and poetry, but besides that, it was boring in verse.

Just my preference...
| Posted on 2008-06-03 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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