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    dots Submission Name: Glitter in my hairdots
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    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    14/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/139/145
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsGlitter in my hairdots
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    I'm over here with the glitter in my hair
    You're over there just watching me
    Like I'm some kind of special affair
    Up on the TV screen back at your house.
    How long has it been since we've
    Been there?
    I don't even know, you don't even care!
    When I put some real heart into
    What it is that I wear
    You pass me up all like you don't even
    See me standing there.

    So I'm moving on up and taking
    It out to somebody else who isn't
    Just going to be like this, faking
    Out of everything he agrees to.
    When you hear this, what is it that you
    Say? Nothing at all, I can't hear
    A thing. But I can feel that glimmer
    Of a smile going from ear to ear
    Across your face.

    So I know that now I'm right
    And you're always gonna be wrong.




    Submitted on 2008-06-03 18:29:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a Great coming of age tale
    You worded this very well
    To me you are speaking of a young person who has been hurt in Love and is finding it hard to forget this person that hurt them and move on
    My only advice is dont forget everything about the situation
    Learn from the Negatives and let them create new Positives to carry your Heart to Happiness
    Great Work!!!

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-06-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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