Caught in the Between -------------------------------------------
She says she doesn’t play guitar
But can make it sing like a harp
She’ll say she doesn’t know you
But is good at guessing who you are
And she is plagued by bad memory
Of people, places, and things
Or all that she has had
That hurts to remember and keep
And I was caught in the between
Of where I was and where I wanted to be
She had me standing there
Wanting to run my fingers through her hair
But I had nothing to say
And her past tends to be discrete
Sometimes that doesn’t matter to me
When we all bear some scars
That aren’t meant to be seen
But I want to take her for a ride
And look at myself in her eyes
And say the transgressions of a man
Aren’t the sins of mankind
And I was caught in the between
Of where I was and where I wanted to be
She had me standing there
Wanting to run my fingers through her hair
But I had nothing to say
She said she has been here before
And hears it knocking at her door
Asking her for what she can spare
Like some kind of alms for the poor
But I’m from the wrong side of the track
And like wandering off the beaten path
And if you can show me how to love
I’ll help you remember how to laugh
And I was caught in the between
Of where I was and where I wanted to be
She had me standing there
Wanting to run my fingers through her hair
And there’s was so much I wanted to say
There was so much I wanted to say to you
The story told is a wonderful tale, because of the naive viewpoint that the narrator seems to talk on. THe whole thing flows really well, although the syllables skip in some point, but that's a technical nitpick that doesn't really take away from the rest of the piece in most places.
My favorite bit :
"And if you can show me how to love
I’ll help you remember how to laugh"
This is a perfect end to the song. I can see a decrescendo here, then a little vault back to an almost silent chorus. At least that's what I heard in my head.
is this a new one? like did you recently write it?
its gorgeous.
she makes me think of the black crowes talks to angels girl... you know? she never mentions the word addiction in certain company/she'll tell you she's an orphan after you meet her family etc etc
i love the tenderness with which the voice of this song seems to sing... its like both the girl and the singer need healing and theres the potential that they'll be good for eachother... learning to love and to laugh are rather foundational for a positive existance
i understand the tension completely... between being where you are and where you wanna be... being who you are and who you wanna be... its so hard... when you know you could be so much more but you dont know how to be it or what to do to make it happen...
And say the transgressions of a man
Aren’t the sins of mankind
this is beautiful. right here. sometimes things need to be said like this... sometimes people take one happening and label the whole of everyone with it... like if one boy lies then all boys are automatically liars...
and im guessing through the actions of the guy he will hopefully be able to SHOW the girl in a real way that not all boys are liars... actions usually speak louder than words aparently...
this is really beautiful.
its awesome to see a new post from you
I love this. I needed to read this.
Favorite lines:
"And I was caught in the between
Of where I was and where I wanted to be"
I hope all is well with you. :)
This is really a very well put together and beautiful write
This flows beautifully in song form and one cant help but getting caught up in your words
I really enjoyed this!!!
Im looking forward to reading more from you in the future
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
God Bless
Ron
Submission Name: Caught in the Between
