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    dots Submission Name: The Fear of Lovedots
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    Author: UnspokenDreamer
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 542/753/205
    Words: 353
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsThe Fear of Lovedots
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    When I was a child, I was born into a family of brokenness. I remember knowing one thing for sure, “No one here loves me.” Even as a small child I knew that I was unloved and feared deep within me that I was perhaps even unlovable. This has haunted me through my entire life. I have spent so many days and nights wondering if anyone really cares for me. Years have gone by where I hoped that my life would soon end. This is not what I was meant for.

    The problem with Love is that we cannot feel it, know it, taste it, or touch it until we believe we are Loved. The very thing we need is the one thing we fear to believe the most. And so we blame God for all of the pain in the world, we curse him for the trouble of life


    Where are you God!?
    Why can’t I see you!?
    Why can’t I hear you!
    Why are you doing this to me!?


    Is it coincidence that the only requirement God has placed on us is sincere faith? And is it all by chance that this God who we must first trust and believe in, is over and over again telling us throughout history that he Loves us and will never abandon us? Until we believe, we cannot know and until we know, we fear to believe.

    But if we never take a chance on this Love, then we will die with nothing, with no hope, with no purpose, with no fulfillment… Love is the currency of life for our souls. Without it we are bankrupt inside.

    I John 4:8
    “God is Love.”

    John 3:16-17
    “For God so loved the world that he gave his one and only Son, that whoever believes in him shall not perish but have everlasting life. For God did not send his son into the world to condemn the world, but to save the world through him.”




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      I thought this was really interesting. I liked how you conveyed such deep thoughts which really made me think myself. You did well in constantly questioning the reader during the poem which I believe helped make this more thought provoking. Before I go on to give my opinion on the content of what you've written, I'll just point out a thing or two which I think could have been improved.

    Where are you God!?
    Why can’t I see you!?
    Why can’t I hear you!
    Why are you doing this to me!?

    This part really threw me off. I think you should have written something like this instead: "We always question his existence . We always ask why... " Or maybe not. I think this sounds worse

    Bah, moving on, I think if we do believe that God exists, we should have faith in what he has done for us, what he has given us. We need to make ourselves believe that he does love us. I think there is no way to actually see if a person loves you, but maybe that's just me. You just have to have good judgment and hope for the best.
    Thanks for writing this and making me think a little, I needed it


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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