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    dots Submission Name: Blood Rust & Tears...dots
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    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 788
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    dotsBlood Rust & Tears...dots
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    The battle focus of 10,000 screaming

    The clenching motion of a fist that's beating

    Hungry eyes of thirsting souls in wake for blood

    The golden hymns of glory's road will bring their flood



    So concentrate... retaliate

    Pick apart your fears

    And turn them into hate

    Drive the blade... engage the rage

    Dont disguise your plots

    And dont deny your pain



    An instrument of countless sendings

    Stained from all the richest lettings

    The flavor for a blossomed ravor

    It savours every taste...



    So walk the grave... laid in shame

    You cant deny the cost

    And you cannot hide from your fate



    You are what you are




    Submitted on 2008-06-04 20:03:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My favorite part was definetly-

    So concentrate... retaliate

    Pick apart your fears

    And turn them into hate

    Drive the blade... engage the rage

    Dont disguise your plots

    And dont deny your pain


    Overall great job!

    -Safire
    | Posted on 2008-06-08 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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