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    dots Submission Name: Freely Styleddots
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    Author: MC white
    ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71/73/45
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Dont make me promise
    or make me say it again
    I feel my love is fleeting and if I try to cage it in
    with the words
    that you want
    it will collapse and die
    and I want
    it to last
    so I look down and sigh
    when you plead with me lady
    its a battle within
    and you may not notice but
    I always let me win
    and I can't describe
    or verbalize
    or satisfy
    your stare
    so I run and hide
    and sorta lie
    till the truth is hardly there





    Submitted on 2008-06-04 22:31:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked what you had to say here. It was a piece filled with condradictions and these are things that we all experience in our relations with members of the opposite sex. Your rhyme scheme was gentle and it worked well.
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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