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Freely Styled


Author: MC white
ASL Info:    20/Male/Ohio
Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 71 /73 /45
Words: 95
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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It's just kinda.... formless.


Freely Styled


Dont make me promise
or make me say it again
I feel my love is fleeting and if I try to cage it in
with the words
that you want
it will collapse and die
and I want
it to last
so I look down and sigh
when you plead with me lady
its a battle within
and you may not notice but
I always let me win
and I can't describe
or verbalize
or satisfy
your stare
so I run and hide
and sorta lie
till the truth is hardly there





Submitted on 2008-06-04 22:31:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked what you had to say here. It was a piece filled with condradictions and these are things that we all experience in our relations with members of the opposite sex. Your rhyme scheme was gentle and it worked well.
| Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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