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    dots Submission Name: I try...dots
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    Author: Love Hurts.....
    ASL Info:    15/M/Aberdeen, Wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.3 - 14/12/7
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Depressed
    Total Views: 113
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    I try to make it through everyday,
    without breaking down for all to see,
    all the pain i suffer unsaid,
    all bottled up inside me.

    I try so hard to impress everyone,
    yet no matter how hard i try,
    it's never good enough for you.
    why try when it hurts worse everytime?

    My girlfriend doesn't even like me,
    my best friend has abandoned me,
    my father disowns me,
    and my grandma calls me a failure.

    But still I try and try,
    through my love for all of you,
    even the pain doesn't bother me,
    If i have people to talk too.




    Submitted on 2008-06-04 23:42:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      my thoughts..
    who're you supposed to talk to when
    "all the pain i suffer unsaid,
    all bottled up inside me. "

    I like it
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by bannathebanana | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww, this peom is pertty good. Not mad. I can relate, so yeah.

    I try to make it through everyday,
    without breaking down for all to see,
    all the pain i suffer unsaid,
    all bottled up inside me.

    I try so hard to impress everyone,
    yet no matter how hard i try,
    it's never good enough for you.
    why try when it hurts worse everytime

    Those two are my favrotie. I like them the best. Seeing how I can relate to those the best. But it's really good. I like it

    My girlfriend doesn't even like me,
    my best friend has abandoned me,
    my father disowns me,
    and my grandma calls me a failure

    I don't like that one though. It really bugs me.

    Overall, it's pretty good though. Keep it up

    ~SuperMel
    | Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by SuperMel | [ Reply to This ]



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