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Help Me Through This

Author: Crestfallenman
ASL Info:    24/M/CA
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Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Help Me Through This

Lord upon the stars,
I send you my prayer.
My journeyed lost soul lives afar,
Lost in a jungle of terror.
A life long with out you,
I might as well not live at all.
Give me the strength to make this through,
Catch me, please, as I take this fall.

So scarred,
So unprepared,
This pain is scarring me,
Take me away from all this misery.

Give me light in my shadows,
Don't ever again let me go.
Help me through this,
Allow me to see the life of four years I missed.

Do not abandon me,
I need you Lord.
Guide me,
Build me,
Help me,
Through all of this.

Submitted on 2008-06-05 01:46:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi there. Hang on buddy, help is at Hand! Your Saviour lives! May I refer you to my first poem - In Peace - after I had similar encounters. Regards. Joachim.
| Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]

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