My Daddy Capitalism

Author: Aaron Felix ASL Info:    21 Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 162 /183 /93 Words: 125

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My Daddy Capitalism

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the static was influential in his work it was blissful silence in the politics when uncle random alternative drank from the too much cup it took a million years to get out! tangential to this is the mansion in which all of what of them lived ironically, very still and yet unmentionable tax poetry: courtesy The bard IRS.

Submitted on 2008-06-05 04:22:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i really liked this a lot, especially the 4th stanza. my only suggestion is that the last line kind of deflates the whole poetic tone of the piece. don't know what to tell you - you've got a real flow going up to that point and maybe you need to find another way to wrap up this piece. just me 2 cents - feel free to take it or leave it. peace, love and all that other junk, joe

| Posted on 2008-06-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]

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