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    dots Submission Name: past my lipsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotspast my lipsdots
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    this storm blows in
    with my eyes inside of it.
    i asked for it to find me
    this morning.
    & somehow heaven heard me.
    it seems to give us these tiny things
    that, like seeds,
    can renew our bodies.
    heaven has it's own geometry though,
    as have i,
    despite long nights
    where i drift here in exile
    while i wait.

    while i wait for this storm?
    or some storm
    to surge through my religion-body.
    to ravage the forest-wreck
    from the ether
    of my heart.
    but this heart is fond
    of soft hushes
    & the dull heat
    that it empties in the night.
    i hear each snap of earth
    like lovemaking
    in the trees.

    like a prayer
    that finds it's way
    past my lips
    in summer,
    the arch of oaks
    that follows this road
    that i stare down each night
    holds no secrets
    save for one.
    that it will remain empty
    long past my acceptance
    of its ability
    to do so...




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