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    dots Submission Name: The Tempting Potdots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    51/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1035/1330/360
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 46
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 690



    Description:
       A poem about the lure of sin through temptation.


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    dotsThe Tempting Potdots
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    He stood above the tempting pot
    and gazed across its boiling rim.
    A yearning glance, a well-timed shot;
    perhaps the water wasn't hot?
    What would it hurt to take a swim?

    As steamy sweat embraced his brow,
    still swirling from the bubbly stew,
    a fragrance beckoned to him now:
    one whiff of bull, one pinch of sow.
    He pursed his lips to taste the brew.

    And closer still our friend was drawn,
    with all his common senses spent.
    By then, of course, no thought would dawn
    what source this meal had preyed upon.
    Beyond the brink this fellow went.


    The Gadfly




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      When they say that someone really got himself into a stew it can be literal according to this piece. You never fail to spur my interest and to make me stop and think about what I just read.
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]


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