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    dots Submission Name: Easy Usdots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    When I die I will ask Jim if they remembered my name
    Or am I strange?
    I don't know but I don't think we are the same
    But I understand what your saying
    When you see sheep dressed like superman, might as well beat them at there own game
    But there are those special ones who only need to see another way
    Burn the fame
    Love not to gain
    Prey in the Lords name

    But I saw you last week and we shared a drink
    Mind paths on collision
    How deep we can think
    unheated debate
    Releasing to freedom everything we hid away
    Ages at rest
    At peace with each other
    Our love breeds ideas to fall from the top
    To spawn the fortunes for better days
    To talk to and reach children from every race

    I'll stand beside you
    hug you and smile
    I'll watch your eyes search through the idol
    It's there choice
    That is what they have minds for
    Life is for us all to decide in
    I just want to see a unity of truth and the righteous

    With you; anytime is a good time
    I smile and watch the screen as players play
    Between us the good times never end
    I wouldn't want this any other way.

    2008 Matthew




    Submitted on 2008-06-05 06:43:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow I liked this piece a lot.

    The way you describe an ever lasting friendship really was beautiful.

    Very unique as well. You told a story in this poem without having to give a books worth of knowledge and story setup.

    Very nicely done!
    | Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]


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