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    dots Submission Name: Negationdots
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    Author: Old
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 57/77/62
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNegationdots
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    Eyes strain for stereognosis
    as pus is draining from the lips.
    my hands are resting on your hips.

    Dust scatters in the wind
    as if in disjuntion of twins.
    No matter what happens

    the world will continue to spin.

    Have you ever felt this weight
    upon your iconoclastic fate?
    Everything is screaming for hate.

    Dust scatters in the wind
    as if in disjunction of twins.
    No matter what happens

    The world will continue to spin.

    Crisp, arctic, and desolate.
    Inside a mind's sky's blue
    I have always, forever, sat
    Meditating on the truth.

    Consumation has been made vast enough
    that it is no longer a size, but rate of expansion.
    An underwater spiritual flame almost snuffed
    has forgotten the chewing of their attention.

    It's here.
    The light
    endeared.

    I see it.
    It lives.
    It's fit.

    My own footsteps; like a funeral procession.
    My thoughs; like everyone's unatoned obsessions.
    My soul; like fire. The fire of hell... the sun...

    Dust scatters in the wind
    as if in disjunction of twins.
    Nothing can happen that won't

    disgust me. Fucking humans.




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      Gosh this was is definitely something!
    I like your style. I have read a few of your poems and I’ve got to say that do have something to say.

    This is really intense a write where you seem be pondering over the way the world works and somehow feel like you don't quite fit. You appear to question people’s beliefs and feel somehow revolted by all that. I do relate to the feeling, believe me.... but I guess that everyone or most of us has been there....

    Your write, at times, sounds as if a delightfully ironic song. I especially like the last 5 stanzas particularly the short ones that are awfully piercing and very telling, as well. They seem to be the core of your write ... like fireworks that splutter in the sky … you know....

    Moreover, I must say that this unavoidably calls to mind some of my own writes such as “A Ringing Movement" where I muse upon similar issues.


    Enjoyed this much thanks for sharing!


    Good luck!


    Ethan
    | Posted on 2008-06-07 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]


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