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    dots Submission Name: Which Craft?dots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWhich Craft?dots

    Sister, let me ask you
    can you make the man
    think he is in love with you?

    Can you trick him into dreaming
    your name on his lips?

    Can you entice him; lure him
    into reaching out to you
    in his sleep to say
    "I love you."
    Even when you're not there?

    Even when he is with someone else;

    Years later?

    Miles away?

    A glance
    A turn
    and he has a twinge that
    you are still with him somehow.

    To carry into new bedrooms.
    Behind someone else's eyes.

    Or does he still see me?

    But that is witchcraft,
    you say?

    Sister, I do not need spells.
    I am charm
    I am enchantment.

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      Very Very Interesting Write
    I Love your Play on words in this
    And the emotion and sincereity in every word is just about perfect
    The title is also very clever as right from the get go one is drawn in to read further
    Very Very Good work
    Im looking forward to reading more new writes from you in the future

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
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    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      A little feminine witchcraft? :) That is the power of the unforgettable at work, as constant as a multitude of memories and regrets stirred together. There is also a hint of inevitability in this post, a sense that his fickle synapses will draw him back to the one who possesses his heart despite every attempt to escape. Unless, of course, he suddenly stumbles on a practitioner with greater powers. Then she will be the image reflected in every nuance of the day. And he will be ensnared again.

    This is a very nice write regarding a very alluring subject.

    Take care
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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