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    dots Submission Name: Liar Liardots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 647/1072/602
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLiar Liardots
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    You told me I was your one and only
    I was part of you, a piece of the puzzle
    I could break you easily, you seemed so vulnerable
    But mostly, you told me I was beautiful

    Liar Liar

    You gave me chills up my twisted spine
    You said I would always be yours and you would never not be mine
    You told me a lot of pretty things, some lovely lies

    Liar Liar

    I can't believe I believed
    You were just another almost lover
    And nothing will ever change

    You told me a lot of pretty things, some lovely lies
    But you were just another almost lover
    No matter how many times we tried to change

    You told me I was something special
    A piece of you, part of the puzzle
    But you were just another almost lover

    Liar Liar
    Liar Liar




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    ||| Comments |||
      okay, honestly, i really hate reading these types of pieces now,
    but in this case, i'm not so bored or anything as much
    just because you put in the whole thing about the puzzle thing.
    that's a metaphor i always like, and it's not always used (which is good)
    and for you to use it for this topic, was fine.
    it helped the topic and didn't ruin the metaphor.
    ya dig?
    ha.
    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      okay, honestly, i really hate reading these types of pieces now,
    but in this case, i'm not so bored or anything as much
    just because you put in the whole thing about the puzzle thing.
    that's a metaphor i always like, and it's not always used (which is good)
    and for you to use it for this topic, was fine.
    it helped the topic and didn't ruin the metaphor.
    ya dig?
    ha.
    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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