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    dots Submission Name: Elsbethdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1039/1115/533
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Low light, my taper’s flame is small and sick,
    While there beyond my window pane the gloom
    Of storms that seem to hint of cloying doom
    And all the inner air is warm and thick.
    I hear my mantel clock go tick, tock, tick,
    Old memories come flooding down a flume.
    It seems I’m not alone within my room,
    For someone’s doused my lonely taper’s wick.

    And well I know that Elsbeth’s sitting there,
    As at the window aspen’s branches claw,
    And now I catch the scent of her gold hair,
    As my old icy heart begins to thaw.
    And I remember Elsbeth, sweet and fair,
    Whose whispers gently banish my despair.




    Submitted on 2008-06-06 08:24:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aaah, sweet memories and romantic ghosts! This poem is rich with both strong word pictures and sound effects, producing an excellent mood to match the story! An old man's dreams, embellished by the perfume and memory of sweet lovely Elsbeth! God love the ladies! Not only do they enrich our poor lives as we live and breathe, but their memories and their ghosts are just as sweet!

    Excellent write, my talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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