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    dots Submission Name: Enclave of Lightdots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 850/653/234
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsEnclave of Lightdots
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    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    I asked of you a dawn of time
    Whence the Nephilim…in rapture of darkness
    Turn back from the dimming armies,
    From their dreams of solitary sprites
    And the stars cease to burn red premonitions

    Do not let me go

    I would ask of you… a light
    A silent disapparition of embers that follow my lead
    And the gnawing tides of pain that now…
    On the trials of fate, so unfathomable,
    Prove me indulgent

    And make my heart volatile

    I will ask of you…in the midst of it all
    My secret, most aspiring… obsolete love
    Never to hide your face
    Behind the adamantine journeys to below
    For my love can only see above

    And I must love to live

    For all is but a strange and uncharted mystery of life
    No one was born to solve it, all were born to end it
    So I must now,
    With all the warmth of my blood
    Light the fires of love on the maps of fate

    To let it know… that it's not my time to go

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~




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      Wow, grat writting! It was so deep.
    I specially liked the ending, I think it was really poerfull.
    I perfectly agree with you that One must love to live, there's no point of living if you haven't given yourself completely to someone else. The most beautiful of all the mysteries of life.
    Keep it up ;)
    | Posted on 2008-06-08 00:00:00 | by rachel gless | [ Reply to This ]
      I find the artwork on this very appealing, and the poem brilliant! It seems to echo a theme that I love, that I may live! But the poem goes beyond that and touches the very fibre of human hope, that we may love (and be loved) and that we may aspire to see the light (as God would have us see it).

    Very nice write, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-06-07 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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