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    dots Submission Name: Everythings Gon Be Aight Now Mandots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 299
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 829
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    Description:
       feeling strange for awhile


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    dotsEverythings Gon Be Aight Now Mandots
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    I tried to tell the mailman what I was thinking
    he looked at me

    I tried to tell the landlord how I felt
    she smiled

    I fell over when I was walking to work today
    I scraped my knee'
    the world fell down
    quite suddenly
    the pieces began to break
    and I woke up
    I have smelled this kind of thing before but never
    has it tasted so bitter
    like metal in my mouth

    I broke away from desire
    it laughed at me

    I found peace and calm
    when I closed my eyes clouds rushed in and called a storm

    I trampled on snails walking to my door
    I cried for them
    planted my garden with Zinnias
    and they won't wake up
    I feed them with water
    and they exercise with the yellow sun
    but they just won't come out to play

    hammer down now
    some sweet lonely mother came out

    told me to not worry
    everything gon be alright now
    and I wish I could see it
    wish i could taste something other than this desperate attempt at sanity
    when I know just how weak I am in the knees

    it makes it hard to walk around all day
    just bathing in the blissful ignorance of my own delusions
    it makes it hard to swim
    when I cant breathe

    another wise man told me that it gon be alright now
    and I believe
    goddamn I believe
    I believe and sometimes I know
    except when I dont
    and then Im just another motherfucker
    with some more shit to say
    about how it aint gon be aight now man
    and how it can but it just isn't


    what the shit is that




    Submitted on 2008-06-08 13:06:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought this was awesome.
    You make me walk through fragmented scenes and images of dreamy desperation and hit me with raw outburst at the end.
    I can't tell you that I think I understand the details in the same way as you meant them, of course not. But If I were to write down the way I feel some days, when I open my eyes too far, those days that you believe it as much as you allow yourself to, until you decide you want to know, and it feels like your brain is the wrong organ to use...It would read like this poem.
    Thanks for writing and posting this!
    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by -YonY- | [ Reply to This ]


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