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    dots Submission Name: The Joke Is This Is Justdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Misc/Satire
    Total Views: 727
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       still feel strange man what to do about it


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    dotsThe Joke Is This Is Justdots
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    I laughed all day because I was playing
    I giggled because I heard the joke
    and I think I'm the only one

    Southern towns are the best
    for nothing

    Small cities are great
    if you like pie
    and I do

    so do you

    A wave will pass over me and I'm gone

    I dreamed that there was a yellow taxi following me
    it didn't drive me home
    it didn't drop anyone off
    there was no one in the car
    it was just there as an example of the temptation
    that I can only imagine
    and isn't really real
    even in my dreams
    it's luminescent
    it escapes me

    My stomach hurts less and I can be thankful
    of a few more seconds without that gnawing dull roar reminding me, urging me
    that there is something wrong

    but I've heard it isn't wise
    to listen to your body
    I've heard that you should only think
    that it's clever
    that your mind can change it all
    and you'll be better

    about a week ago I knew that it would go away

    sometimes I open the door and I pass out

    it isn't what's inside

    it isn't what outside

    it's just
    all the time
    only that
    and cannot fucking breathe

    I smiled at the end of the sentence, because it was all a joke that I could see
    and it wasn't funny

    no

    it wasn't something to laugh about

    but still I could hear half of me shreaking
    and I could hear half of me shrug










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      One of the better things I've read in my days.
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