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Officially unbaerable


Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I've been going through a lot of problems with my family because they just don't understand the way I live and the way I love and they keep underestimating it and that has generated doubts on myself. But I'm over with that!!


Officially unbaerable



Officially unbaerable
How this life has become

Are there different ways to live
or different ways to love?

Are there in life some choices
that go against the rules?

Or if you break the mold,
does that mean that you're wrong?

You have to be sweet, tender
to be the perfect bride

If you don't follow standards
your love is useless now?

Rules make you cuestion yourself
your feelings, your pride too

I love the way I know
I live my life my way

I'm building my own rules
I'm baking my own pains

My family, my friends
The world, everyone else

I wish took one step back
Stop torturing my mind

Stop saying that I'm wrong
and my feelings are low

My thoughts rotten are not
They're just the way I know




Submitted on 2008-06-08 17:57:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This was written very well. I wasn't exactly descriptive, you've left me in a mysrery. (nice) I know the feeling of having your family not agree with the way of life you choose. It sucks, so I'm glad your past it. Just remember it's your life, live it the way you want and everything will be fine.
Keep up the awesome work and I'll keep reading

»Haely«
| Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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