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    dots Submission Name: Blowin' Grassdots
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    Author: jkhutchings
    Elite Ratio:    1.23 - 3/6/22
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBlowin' Grassdots
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    Song-a-ri is a little village
    South Korea is its home
    G.I. recreation center
    frequent soldier host
    built before any hooches
    went there one day
    to phone across the
    big water to my girl
    walking back to post
    mama-san starts barking at me
    about her cherry girl
    twelve years old and
    only five dollars can do
    by the time I got past her
    it dropped to no charge
    a little further down
    an area known as Turkey Row
    worn out women leaning
    against their doors yelling
    blow jobs fifty cents can do
    kept on going
    hiked about five miles
    past one rice paddy after another
    smell of human waste in the air
    but didn't notice
    papa-san squatted down
    in the only cabbage field
    conical hat on his head
    smoking a pipe with
    opiated squinty face watching
    headed back to Blue Lancer Valley
    beautiful home to the
    Second of the Thirty Eighth Infantry
    passed through Nu-la-ri
    where Freedom Bridge and
    the Imjin River are
    down the mile long road
    to the compound
    past a ditch full
    of unused condoms
    remnants of a briefing
    in which we were told
    that the only one in our unit
    who could ride bareback
    was the Indian Chief
    on the Second Division patch.......










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