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    dots Submission Name: A demons dreamdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 1047
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1295



    Description:
       its like a roller coater ride....on crack


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    dotsA demons dreamdots
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    I am beautiful
    I am ugly
    I am wretched
    Unto the bone;
    I am hated
    I am nothing
    So perfect
    When youíre all alone

    So wake up
    And tell me its over,
    Fall to sleep
    To forget these dreams.
    All these tragedies
    Rolling over
    As everything you knew
    Is just as I seem

    Hand me a shotgun
    Iím feeling horny
    Put a bullet
    Right between your legs
    Tell me youíll smile
    When I bleed for you
    Tell me youíll die
    When I do it too

    Nightmares and tragedies
    Ö
    Hurricanes, forgotten dreams
    Ö.
    An eclipse
    On your broken heart
    Ö..
    Death of life
    Is merely
    Just where you start

    So tell me itís over
    Tell me itís true
    That what you tell me
    Is unparalleled proof
    That this is just the ending
    The beginnings soon
    A breathe from
    Everyday life
    Soon enough
    Itíll be longing too

    For youíve never hated
    Youíve never loved
    Yours sins are pure
    If even enough
    An angelic thought
    Is what it seems
    Even in the wake
    Of a demons dream




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    ||| Comments |||
      you play on contrast so perfectly, maybe even better than I do; but it's not yin and yang with your writing- it's more like a battle between the two. and hell, if two things [opposite effects] that NEED each other to simply be/be recognized feel the need to fight and be seen above the other- what kind of peace is there TO hope for? on any level?

    "I have a dream- but nobody cares, nobody wants to listen"
    and
    "I'd die in your arms , if you were dead too"
    keep arguing amongst themsevles over which one accompanies this write better :P

    either way hun, good shit, remind me never to get all trippy on a roller coaster though, ya know, just in case.

    love you =]
    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      dude this poem is awesum it just flowed. i lyke when u say death of life iswhere u start


    thats kool.



    peace
    grim
    | Posted on 2008-08-19 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Nightmares of the past, present and future surrounding you. searching your soul for answers. Great piece. Keep writing
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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