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    dots Submission Name: Reply To a Talk Before The Weddingdots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.55 - 800/426/258
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsReply To a Talk Before The Weddingdots
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    i have not said, I have a perfect attitude,
    though it may appear to you as such,
    I'm only a person with a common touch
    exploring my longi and lattitude.

    To you i've always told the truth
    but perhaps sometime I've remained aloof;
    though love demands a perfect answer
    lest it grows into a deadly cancer.

    I've told you all of what I am,
    you've been an angel listening to me;
    i've told you of what i wish to be
    and that's not as a broken toothed cam.

    my only desire is to be faithful to you,
    if you can promise the same to me,
    then we can soar in winds so free
    and not be jealous of who wears the shoe.





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      in this one, my favorite line is also my least favorite... kinda. The last line, IMO, doesnt seem to fit with the rest of the poem, but then again, it makes a great ending line.

    i like the rhyme in this piece, it give a direct begining and ending to each stanza, but you already knew that :P

    its always a joy to read your work, i cant wait for your next submissions.

    peace.Guermo
    | Posted on 2008-06-22 00:00:00 | by Guermo | [ Reply to This ]


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