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    dots Submission Name: Suicide Towndots
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    Author: revol
    ASL Info:    18/F/Far away from you
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 12/13/11
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 133
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 963



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       I don't know what this is. -.-


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    dotsSuicide Towndots
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    Plastic blondes with plastic boobs
    Want forever to be young
    Men lifting weights to stay so strong,
    Let's all move to the suicide town.

    There is no hope, there is no age
    All we have is pain
    There's no tomorrow, make the best of today
    The time is lost within our minds.

    In our suicide town,
    We aren't the same
    Our bodies differ like our minds
    In our suicide town,
    Maybe you'll survive
    Without lipstick, bleach and botox.

    We need some booze,
    We need some drugs,
    Give us some rope
    And razor blades
    We don't give a fuck,
    We will die young
    Just move to the suicide town.

    The end will come,
    And the buildings will burn
    Riot in the streets of London
    But we won't care,
    We won't be there
    We'll die in our suicide town.




    Submitted on 2008-06-09 09:04:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it but somewhere along the line I thought you could have done alot better with this piece, I think the title and the first stanza deserves more

    BVG
    Keep up the good work
    | Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      Stunning. I really liked it. It's got a true point and as the other two comments say, a very beautiful flow. Good job.

    -Elissa
    | Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by hateyourlove | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem. Judy Like Kevin said i love how you can flow so easily. Although the only thing i ask is why " suicide town" ? It looks like its about all these people being fake . Unless im reading it wrong ...... i think a better title would suited for this

    ~ Ms.Understood
    | Posted on 2008-06-10 00:00:00 | by Rehian | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you can flow easily, first thing it's beautiful and really something to admire. The idea is beautiful, omg i use that too much, but still I like the message of it. and for a "I don't know what this is" thats pretty cool

    Kevin
    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]



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