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    dots Submission Name: From the Lakedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1034/1092/518
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsFrom the Lakedots
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    The Moon spins in a pirouette
    This night where through the tree tops glide
    Pale ghosts in creamy silhouette,
    Down to the comber-heavy tide.

    From deep within the haunted lake
    Is sung the saddest madrigal,
    Enough my very heart to break,
    Its echoes vast, sidereal.

    Upon her head gold coronets,
    I watch her from the lake arise,
    Her throat is gemmed with red rosettes
    While there are star streams in her eyes.




    Submitted on 2008-06-09 10:07:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wonder about the girl is she good or is she hurt? Hmm. nice work.
    | Posted on 2008-06-10 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely and eerie ghostly picture this poem presents! The Lake, giving up its ghosts, and a lovely among them!

    Our ranch abounds with the ghosts of family and incidents past, and one field contains a small cemetery where my parents and grandparents are buried. We at times had superstitious hired help who would not work at that particular field past sundown because of their fear of the cemetery and the spirits there!

    Nice write, my talented friend!
    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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