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    dots Submission Name: your never alone dots
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    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 20/83/37
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1662
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsyour never alone dots
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    You're never alone, I'm always near,
    When your troubled, down or blue.
    All you have to do is call me,
    I'm always here for you.

    It doesn't matter where I'm at,
    It doesn't matter when.
    When you need someone to talk to,
    I'm here to be your friend.

    If you need someone to hold your hand,
    or a hug to say I care.
    If you need a shoulder to cry on,
    for you I will be there.

    So never think you are a burden,
    when the weight gets to be to much.
    You might find it if look hard enough,
    a good friend could be the right touch.

    You're never alone, I'm always here,
    through the good times and the bad.
    i never want to see you sad.
    i will always be here if you need a good friend.




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      I really liked this poem. It so clearly expresses deep loyal friendship and is in a way touching. Even though some of the stanzas are not full rhymes, it still flows smoothly and is easy to read. The only things I would change would be 'to be to much' to 'to be too much' and 'if look hard' to 'if you look hard.' Otherwise, I agree with MinervaBlu.
    -Katriana
    | Posted on 2011-10-17 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
      ok actually this one and whispers are tied!!!!!!! i love them!!!!!
    | Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by ShadowGaze | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounds great to me. Wonderful job!!!
    | Posted on 2008-06-10 00:00:00 | by laffeytaffey | [ Reply to This ]
      Perfect! This is the best I've read all day. It flowed superbly, the emotion was portrayed fantastically, it was all around perfect! I have many poems on this topic, so I can relately closely. I'm glad there is somene else out there willing to be a true friend to their people. Keep up the magnificent work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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