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    dots Submission Name: feels torndots

    Author: jjd
    ASL Info:    20/male/Griffin, Ga.
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 20/78/34
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsfeels torndots

    I feel like I'm the only one
    Who doesn't understand that
    trying you're hardest isn't good enough
    And when I'm at the limit
    I feel like I'm being held back
    And all these feelings inside
    Are being tempted

    So now I have to face the facts
    I don't see why I've walked these tracks
    Over and over again
    No more waiting here
    I need to be fighting there

    This is who I will be
    This is who I am
    No more shall I be told that I am free
    I will not give in
    I will not surrender
    I have entered the lion's den

    Now I am away from the pain
    Away from the aches
    Now I am done waiting
    Now I am free
    To be who I want to be

    Submitted on 2008-06-09 12:09:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this one 2! its easy to relate to.
    | Posted on 2009-07-12 00:00:00 | by ShadowGaze | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, I thought this one was great! I can totally relate to it. And that's important. Good joB

    | Posted on 2008-06-10 00:00:00 | by laffeytaffey | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. I liked it alot. It flowed nicely and was structured well. I know the feeling of being told who you 'going to be' I hated it as I'm sure you do. Just know that only you can decide who you are going to be. Keep up the awesome work and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-06-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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