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One More Funny For the Sake of Random!!!


Author: Sephiroth
ASL Info:    22/Male/WA
Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 60 /67 /29
Words: 223
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Last attempt at a real poem. more actual funnies to come, though.


One More Funny For the Sake of Random!!!



Hey guys, I want to write something funny.
Over the past school year, I learned to write.
I thought, maybe, that I could make some money
Doing what I show you this very night.

My guess is that you are not laughing yet.
Maybe it is like a Pally gone Ret.
For those who do not play World of Warcraft
A Ret Pally is some serious stuff.

The do crazy damage during battle
They are deadly like a snake called 'rattle'
Before you know what has happened to you
You will have lost to a Paladin buff

As you can guess I have been playing a lot
For half a year I have been on my Mage
I fought, and learned, all the many classes
With this, I could no more chase the lasses

Sure, my life has ended without reward
And yet, I am not sad about my life.
Now I head to Post-High, college they say.
I can only thank the Almighty Lord.

And so I end on a serious note.
It was not quite a laugh as I had hoped.
Maybe it had some random bits in there.
But it was all in Iambic Penta
I told you that I learned a few new techs.
And now I end this with a final flair.




Submitted on 2008-06-10 01:47:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Maybe this is off-beat enough to be funny? There's a trap one can fall into when something is very funny to the writer, but we hide it so well in metaphor or cryptic irony that most readers don't get it.

The rhyme seemed a little forced in places.

An interesting read, though, it started great, with the personal approach to the reader.

be happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2009-03-18 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm..

this is the kind of poem that if i read at 2:00 in the morning i would be laughing my a** off.

it kind of has a flow on to its own. and no rhym but even though i dont like unrhymed poems that much it was ight.

it kind of made me feel like some one in the 70s was writing a poem about what they did while they were high.

i dunno. dont get me wrong. i do like it. and it did make me laugh. and no it wasnt 2 am.

you seem like you have the same kind of personality as i do. lol. and that shows through in your poem.

it was a fun read and it made me laugh but i kind of finished reading the poem and was like... is that poetry? or something really funny?

sorry for the harshness.

keepin it real
~annie
| Posted on 2008-06-12 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]


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