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    dots Submission Name: Once So Memorabledots

    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 71/128/60
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
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    dotsOnce So Memorabledots

    *They lower me down, with one last sound you

    say, "Please wait for me (Don't go away...)

    #Don't let them tell you I'm gone forever

    I'm always one step behind. You never

    Waved back when I waved goodbye

    When I took your hand, you walked away

    We gather here today beneath the trees

    I stand beside the mausoleum door

    Waiting for some sign you can see me

    (But no eyes follow)

    With your head bowed, I can see your thoughts

    All focusing on me, they fade away

    For someone once so memorable

    (Why amd I so hollow?)

    Now I'm screaming, "Don't let me go!"

    I never asked for this, You'll never know

    How much I missed you

    They lower me down, with one last sound you

    Say, "Please wait for me. Don't go away..."

    But how can I leave you?

    How can I leave you?

    When I never left at all?

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