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    dots Submission Name: Dreamworlddots
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    Author: Ayane
    ASL Info:    16/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 71/120/59
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 72
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 962



    Description:
       Written for Mara

    Dreams all have meaning and in that sense, a purpose. Whether it be to warn us, give us hope, frighten us, or simply give us a reason to keep going.


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    dotsDreamworlddots
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    I'm sitting on this mushroom

    Wandering through Wonderland

    I'm sinking in a small room

    Drowning in a sea of sand



    I know it's just a dreamworld

    But it comes so easily

    Take my hand and look into my eyes



    *And wake me up

    Take me away

    Carry me to another place

    I ask for a way out

    But they throw away the key

    Wake me up from my own fantasy



    I'm flying through the nightsky

    Come with me to Neverland

    We'll sail upon our own ship

    Weigh your trust and take my hand



    I could stay here forever

    Live in my greatest dreams

    Take my hand and look into my eyes

    *

    *




    Submitted on 2008-06-10 13:36:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I would say this poem is pretty good, indeed. however some stanzas are brilliant:

    I'm sitting on this mushroom
    Wandering through Wonderland
    I'm sinking in a small room
    Drowning in a sea of sand...

    perfect meter, let alone rhyme...this stanza is brilliantly concieved as well.

    What kind of poetry do you read??? I loved it... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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