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    dots Submission Name: poems in the mirrordots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotspoems in the mirrordots

    this morning presented itself
    as still-life
    from the inside.
    while the wafting ghosts
    travelled over my olive fingers
    & napped their way across my eyelids
    in a way that was anything
    but the soft hushing that i've known.
    it was more like the squelching birds
    beneath my nails
    & this circuit-board brain
    of atlantis
    that seems to stretch stars
    like nothing ever happened.
    like nothing
    like the framed wrist-cutter to my right.
    i'm not sure when it happened.
    night has a way of forgetting me.
    it always finds me
    in the dark,
    which is where i, also, find it,
    & moves into
    the empty part of me
    that waits for something
    that will never arrive
    until i've put it out
    of my secret thoughts
    i have this tendency
    to look for someone
    where the air
    meets my honeyed tongue.
    & there's a door here
    that, once entered,
    will lead me to her hidden self.
    i find poems in the mirror
    after i wake
    each morning.
    i seem to always
    be searching
    for this abundant always.

    & then i wash,
    but the beast is everywhere....

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      Ah ok. I see now what you are doing. I was a bit confused on my other comment but the title of this piece explained it to me. It's like you're exploring yourself through poetry. I like this one it has some good black and white flashes. The ending is not that great though. I can see that indeed our styles have some similarities. I could see myself using this line: "from the inside." exactly like you did in this poem. My work is diverse though. Try exploring it some time, especially the old ones that don't show up on the first page you'll find some different views to writing poems. Also I recommend reading "mathematics2" you'll see my aesthetic side there...
    | Posted on 2008-06-11 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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